Sunday, December 21, 2014

Weekend Writing Warriors #98!

Ho, ho, ho, happy Sunday! :D 'Tis the season to read and write! Now that I'm on holidays I plan to do more of both. As for all of you, here's a pre-Christmas present in the form of another excerpt from Adventures in Online Dating!

First, here's the blurb: After too many failed relationships, too many shots of tequila, and too many not-so-gentle nudges from her best friend, Sydney Montrose joins an online dating site in hopes of finding THE ONE. During her adventures, she crosses paths with a professional gamer who lives with his parents, a sweet and sarcastic parking enforcement officer, a flirty barista, a mystery man, a touchy-feely former felon, and a clown. Which one will she choose? Well, that's all entirely up to you! :-D

After the vote last week, the majority of you wanted Sydney to give Charlie a chance, so here's their date continued....

Sydney and her annoying conscience decided it was better to write a note before fleeing without a trace—one of those charming ‘it’s not you, it’s me’ varieties. Just as she finished scribbling her thoughts and feelings on a napkin, the man of the hour stepped out of the washroom and into the number one spot in her heart. Holy freaking cow. As he strode toward their table, she quickly tucked the napkin in her purse, sat up a little straighter, and stuck out her chest a little more.
            Charlie was beaming when he sat down again, a grin broader and more genuine than any make-up could do justice. His eyes were filled with wonder, like he couldn’t believe she was still there, and she hated herself for almost running out on him. 
            She could see every adorable freckle on his face now. His smiling lips looked so kissable, and his hair, dear God, his hair—auburn curls that spoke of a touch of devilishness in this delicious do-gooder.

Thanks so much for stopping by and be sure to visit the other Weekend Writing Warriors! 

Merry Christmas and happy holidays to you and yours! The best gift of all is having your support every week and getting to participate in this wonderful world of word-sharing! Enjoy every moment! :) 
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13 comments:

  1. You are the master of deep third, Evelyn. I love how you plunk the reader down soundly inside the character's head. Nicely done!

    No post for me this week.

    Merry Christmas!

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    1. Aww, Teresa! Thank you so much! Merry Christmas to you too! :)

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  2. Your inner thoughts and descriptions make me want to meet Charlie. Thanks for the Christmas present.

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    1. Always my pleasure, Charmaine! Thanks for the constant support! Merry Christmas to you! :)

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  3. Yes, online is a gamble. I take it there was no picture on his profile? Or did she just figure it wasn't really his pic?

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    1. There were a few pictures on his profile, but when she first met him in the 3-D world he was wearing clown make-up. So this is a nice, surprising change for her. lol

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  4. I KNEW I liked him, despite the whole clown thing! Terrific excerpt!

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  5. Glad he cleans up nice, and glad she stayed! He sounds adorable.

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  6. Yay Charlie! Sounds like the clown makeup was hiding a whole bunch of handsome. Now I just hope he doesn't find the 'Dear John' note in her purse...

    Enjoy your extra writing time over the holidays! I get to see my boy in 3 hours, 21 minutes -- not that I'm keeping track or anything!

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  7. So glad she didn't leave and it seems he is, too! Now she just needs to get rid of that dang napkin!

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  8. I agree with Gemma, your visual descriptions in this snippet are fantastic! Great job!

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  9. I'm so glad he came back before she skated out. Great job conveying her excitement!

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