Sunday, February 3, 2013

Weekend Writing Warriors #1!

Good morning, friends! You might have noticed a slight alteration to my usual Sunday blog title. That's because Six Sentence Sunday has come to a close. But, thanks to some awesomely fantastic people, we authors have a new way of sharing bits and pieces of ourselves and our stories via the Weekend Writing Warriors! Woooohoooo! Oh, and best news of all, I'm technically allowed to post eight sentences now. EIGHT WHOLE SENTENCES. My life freaking rocks. :D Today, I decided to bust out eight extremely strange sentences from a story I wrote a number of years ago. I share it now because I'm feeling a bit sniffly and stuffy. Seems fitting.

I present to you...The Cold War

“The attack will commence in T minus two minutes,” Olfacto informed his troops. His jaw was set in a firm line. A thin sheen of sweat had formed over his brow, but his eyes were cold, hard, experienced in the world of battle, and detached from compassion. Only the strongest survived, and he intended to persevere.

“It’s a dark path we follow, men,” their commander continued. “Be alert, look for the openings, and whatever you do, stay away from the Cilia.”

Twelve men fought aboard The Rhinovirus. A sister ship, The Coronavirus, was commandeered by Mucosa, a warrior as accomplished and relentless as Olfacto himself. 

If this doesn't make sense yet, it will soon enough. ;) Thanks for reading and I hope to see you back here next week! I'll bake cookies! 
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26 comments:

  1. Well done. Excellent description of Olfacto.

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    1. Thank you so much, Cerian! So glad you're enjoying it! :)

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  2. I love where this seems to be going *grins widely* - the names are the give away, I think, and they are wonderful. And I, too, like the description of Olfacto. I've already made him Russian in my head, somehow that seems to fit with what I think he is as well as the title. Can't wait for more.

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    1. I thought the names were a giveaway too, but when I initially wrote this a few people were stumped until the end. lol, you're not the first to think of Olfacto as Russian. So, so thrilled with your reaction! I'll share more next week! :)

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  3. Ha! I remember this. So very clever. :) You guys think Russian, I think Star Trek, Klingons or maybe Cardasians. ;)

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    1. I knew you'd remember, Laurie. :D Thanks for reading again. I'm thinking of entering this story in an upcoming contest, so I'm running it past another audience.

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  4. hahaha! You really did make me LOL! Great descriptions. This one's got a future in print *somewhere*! :D

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    1. That's exactly what I wanted to hear! Thank you so much, Marcia! I'm grinning from ear to ear. :D

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  5. Ha! I remember The Cold War! This is aweseome!

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    1. Hee! Thanks, Mags! I knew you'd remember it too! :D I had so much fun writing it.

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  6. Interesting beginning, Evelyn. Who's POV are we in? Obviously someone looking at the commander. I kept thinking outer space by your ship descriptions. :)

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    1. If I told you whose POV it's in, that would totally spoil the story. So you'll have to stay tuned for that. ;) Thank you so much for commenting, Siobhan! In my mind, the ships are like spaceships, but we're not exactly in outer space here. Somewhere much darker and much scarier. :D

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  7. You showed us his character in these few sentences. Nice.

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    1. Thank you so much, Elaine! I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment! :)

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  8. Wonderful personification of a cold.

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    1. Thanks, Sue! I'd love to publish this one someday. Maybe as a children's book. :)

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  9. Pretty funny! Trying to imagine where this story goes next LOL. Terrific snippet...

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    1. Yay! So, so happy you're enjoying it, Veronica! Thanks for stopping by!

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  10. It took a brain shift to realize this is a new story. Interested to see how this one turns out!

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    1. Surprise! New story. :D Thanks for checking it out, Anastasia! More next week!

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  11. I enjoyed this, but particularly loved the name of the ships. Wicked-clever!

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    1. Aww, thank you so much, Sarah! So thrilled you enjoyed it! :)

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  12. Emitting loud snorts of mirth here! Well done.

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    1. Hee! As long as you're not snorting for another reason. ;) Thanks, Elin!

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  13. I'm getting a bad visual of Mucosa, such a slimy warrior. lol

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